Im writing a song and need some help

Discussion in 'Music' started by Blame, Jan 12, 2015.

  1. Blame

    Blame Next Generation

    So yea I started writing a song and so far I only have the chorus and the end which is gonna be a counter chorus.Now I need to just fill in the blanks and I need some help

    sick Little Bastards

    Cus were sick little Bastards
    that never tell the truth and when it comes to it
    I dont wanna stay with you

    I dont wanna talk or be alone with you
    cus when it come to it
    Ill never be man enough for you
    sick little bastards

    Counter/end chorus:
    were sick little bastards
    cus you`ll never know what we do
    when I run away-ay
    its an excuse to never tell you

    I dont want to be alone
    but Im to worried to tell you
    Ima sick little bastard
    and i love you

    the song is about holding in your feelings for another and denying all love and affection toward them,but them finally accepting the truth
    I wanted to have like an up beat rock/emo/punk vibe. Kind of like "All American Rejects" and "My Chemical Romance"

    post your suggestions

    On a side note Ill be posting Updates to the song and when the song is finished Ill sing it for you guys :D
    Last edited: Jan 13, 2015
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  2. Whoa_Its_Hannah

    Whoa_Its_Hannah Dungeon Master Staff Member

    Long time no see man :P but that's cool that you write music. I like what you got so far! :) It's kinda difficult for me to give input when i cant hear what it sounds like in your head unfortunately ..

    But most songs I have heard have 2 verses... And I really like how it turns and ends with "I love you". So maybe it would be cool if the first verse was about the denial, and then the chorus, and then next verse would be like a ... Slightly more inability to deny the love. Like you can see the love seeping out through the cracks while trying to hide it still. And then it ends with a repeat of the chorus, and then after the repeat it finally ends with the counter chorus. :3
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  3. c_t_f

    c_t_f Minecraft Staff Staff Member

    I think that Hannah's idea would be a lot better than anything I'd suggest. :P

    Also, long time no see! Good to have you back Blame! :D

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  4. Blame

    Blame Next Generation

    I was thinking of some stuff for the beginning so here it is

    I hate the way you walk
    and I hate the way you talk
    From your blond hair to blue eyes,
    you know I hate you, So why cant you realize

    ima sick little bastard that will always hate you
    I dont wanna try or even think about lovin you
    because I know that me plus you
    will be an automatic lose lose

    I dont want be your friend and I dont want to be part of you
    so please get out of my life
    cus I can say with all my heart
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  5. Whoa_Its_Hannah

    Whoa_Its_Hannah Dungeon Master Staff Member

    I like it :D if you get more stuff make sure to post that too cause now I'm curious XD
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